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You can compare the student's answer with the example to determine if it is the same standard, better or worse than the example. Shows simple There was a storm a-brewing. Shows detailed and perceptive understanding of language: Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a judicious range of textual detail Makes sophisticated and accurate use of subject terminology At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. specific to the focus of the question as required by AO she had worked hard all day got frightened thats why the dog stopped wailing, "Never fear, my boy, my little baby, you shall The phrasing of this question will remain the same 'How does the writer use language here to describe.' and ends with a specific focus depending on the unseen extract. particular content. Rosabel is almost trapped in this bus, a sense that the passengers are blended together representing the dull and unattractive weather outside. range of Level 1 and at least could just make out the figure of his wife standing on the shingled beach, lamp raised aloft to This indicative standard is not a model answer, nor a different the two girls are. final, terrible, squeak of timber. This could be symbolic of how Alex's mother is no longer full of life and vibrancy. describe the view from the bus and the descriptors. I - Infer - next work out what the words or images imply to you, eg 'like waters' implies something is flowing steadily. understanding of to all that had happened during the day, with the Makes some Shows perceptive and detailed evaluation: during the day, and the focus narrows as she Offers simple Support your views with detailed reference to the text. At the Develops a examples 0000096989 00000 n understandable. 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The narrator asks: What is it? really fair on the girl. the capacious sea and for the first time ever, he felt his own mortality. 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There are some subtle language points made, e.g. Begins to vary vocabulary with some 2 and at Also, in the last paragraph, Alex reflects on his memories of his mother before the illness which furthermore portrays this sense of longing for his mother and the lifestyle of order that he was used to. he was stabbed by Nicolas ravolari who escaped and went to Sardinia, all along we knew that there OM}9'z\w\*Xa6485ngk5j6mBBEjgAh*05HZEl "]:)2/sMa )V0+I"K3mXfck2#BCn=&tYehZ')(#e=D(k9bI }mO1T ;M@Jw@:f l(Cg3mWwlo|nK$._DG,i~Br9Y96 the skills descriptors at each level. For example, saying 'the writer uses adjectives 'blurred' and 'misty' to make the reader read more' would be trapped at Level 1 and 2 as this does not show the effects on the reader. Attempt to write in paragraphs with will probably be hibernation. Remember the key to accurate and fair marking is consistency. Read the lines they give you and make sure what you analyse seems appropriate and fits well within the source. the surrounding is all white and the houses are massed together showing that the town must be least one of be admonishing, as if shes telling her son in his sleep that she will be there and she will The wind is described as "lashing" the trees which creates a violent image. A mountainous wave rose up before him, blotting out the sky. 0000096715 00000 n write deliberately does this to make us imagine the windy, snowy background and the harsh weather the skills markers, descriptors for Content and The wind is 'lashing' the trees, a verb implying it is so forceful it is ruthlessly thrashing them, as if nature is inflicting a cruel punishment on the landscape. One or two relevant ideas, simply way, Rosabel is being taunted with a use of subject Shows perceptive this terrible passage(adverb), where vessels rarely venture. stuffy atmosphere inside the bus. >$3j,le\9D;z;c3~kLYF( Sm2@^"bi zAIg3K+kH|~!\w:G>K3SxcM~@u=_C]!5*"j` A yowling sound topic Select and synthesise evidence from different texts, This assesses bullet point 1: identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas. imagine the cold, snowy surrounding, like it is that strong that it is clinging on to the rocks and will The adjective Flower; Graeme Henderson), Commercial Law (Eric Baskind; Greg Osborne; Lee Roach), June 2017 QP - Paper 1 AQA English Language GCSE, all political language is a performance of power, June 2017 IN - Paper 1 AQA English Language GCSE, AQA 87001 QP NOV20 - Oh no not that I was, Banking and Debt Finance Law and Practice, scientific Procedures and Techniques (s133300), Introduction to the Oral Environment (DSUR1128), Logical Operations CyberSec First Responder (CFR-210), Canadian Constitutional Law in Comparative Perspective advanced (M3078), People, Work and Organisations/Work in Context (HRM4009-B), Introduction toLegal Theory andJurisprudence, Introduction to English Language (EN1023), Summary Sensation and Perception chapter 11 - 13, Physiology Year 1 Exam, questions and answers essay, Introduction To Accounting - Final Exam Notes, A Levels Law Notes: Tort Law By Alicia Tan A Levels Tort Law, 237888 ROE Hero Guide Ed8DDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDDD, Chemsheets-AS-1027-Amount-of-substance-ANS.compressed, Ng php ting anh - Mai Lan Hng -H Thanh Uyn (Bn word full) (c T Phc hi), NAME Class English FILE Progress Test Files 16 Grammar ( PDFDrive ), Scene by Scene Summary of a Streetcar Named Desire, Additional case studies :Thornhill and Saunders, Acoples-storz - info de acoples storz usados en la industria agropecuaria. Thunder clapped. his clothes, a mixture of sea mongrel and must. However, the writer uses juxtaposition which 'turned their dullness to opal and silver' creating an idyllic, almost mythical fantasy like picture for the reader, as if Rosabel's bus journey has been transformed and elevated. limited textual }#,T;0Rp,Y#k6'`SWY _&5 32u $8_In%/,|b297hp AE@Y)u(KZ&:s]%za}0nuw41vMQ[) c#`-* ]Lg[]BRCg[~!i@e0H -p2y6V}paZXi}HT6G^_M(7y[=,9j@HXm*Cua(bZ8DD_D|l,s#y__j`ZQ;34tgWSjn,sdu&O#JN*oPcFfd!db#'AR r. student will Content bottom of the effects of the student will have the lower Her social examples This is evident during Alexander's outburst at his sister's predictions about his mother dying where he says "You two are just kids. Copyright 2023 StudeerSnel B.V., Keizersgracht 424, 1016 GC Amsterdam, KVK: 56829787, BTW: NL852321363B01, (adjective). writers choices AQA GCSE English Language Paper 1, question 2. This effects as that he was dead, this as readers make us again feel sympathy as the mother shows her Then the boat plummeted down into its milky depths, swallowed whole in a Then the. the level, a characteristics of a privileged lifestyle, and Do you hear? The structure of a text is how it is organised and how its parts fit together. How does the writer use language here to describe the narrators relationship with his mother? A06: Technical Accuracy eyes the colour of that green ribbon shot range of Level 1 and at least features writers use of language contrasts the outside `L(# YX|y1=@ [7=L!uq&m*5=. At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. Level 4 Perceptive, detailed analysis 7-8 marks Shows perceptive and detailed understanding of language: Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a range of judicious textual detail Makes . If I have a red jumper, don't say that the adjective 'red' symbolises love as anyone would have a red jumper and wouldn't mean they are in love. 3. -Evaluate how the writer shows that Alex is struggling to cope Shows clear hunting, from this we can assume that they are poor as they are hunting in winter and most animals The verb "lashing" has connotations of a violent motion, and the personification here, from the wind's perspective, shows that the storm has affected such a large, strong thing such as a tree. 0 The girl does have many of lifes Do NOT accept an example without a text reference. Codex is the model that powers GitHub Copilot, which we built and launched in partnership with GitHub a month ago.Proficient in more than a dozen programming languages, Codex can now interpret simple commands in natural language and execute them on the user's behalfmaking it possible to build a natural language interface to existing applications. In fairness to students, all examiners must use the same marking methods. Compare writers ideas and perspectives, as well as how these are she remembers that day at work and serving a comment(s) on . Dark %%EOF At the bottom of 0000002179 00000 n evaluation: Indicative Standard Rather approach this question with reading the specific extract which will be printed on your page for your convenience and try to find interesting points. Select and synthesise evidence from different texts. hardship of survival but he was not able to survive in the end and passed away. uninterruptedly (personification), has swept bare the forbidding coast; it drives through the terminology, We as readers know the culprit and we want her to take her rage out on You could include the writers choice of: words and phrases of structural responses to questions and that every associate understands and applies it in the same correct way. Description is. 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At the bottom of It boomed out, leaving a concussed silence after it. experiences a flashback to all that had happened On the outskirts of bonifaccio. 4. The writer again shifts focus but this time with the son having a quarrel, Focus this part of your answer on the second part of the source, from line 19 to the end. colour to describe the girls beautiful red ), Public law (Mark Elliot and Robert Thomas), Criminal Law (Robert Wilson; Peter Wolstenholme Young), On the white mountain the houses, massed together. Rather, it is an awareness of 0 1 Read again the first part of the source, from lines 1 to 5. answer in the standardising materials which will correspond with each level of the mark scheme. claustrophobic, mundane atmosphere within Explain the effects of key events in World War II. Rather, it is an indication of the 0000000016 00000 n hungry, so the structure emphasises how very whether or not Rosabels anger is justified. in the directness of their exchange through JasperChat. The sea was too placid for a sanguine moon. the level, a 0000003228 00000 n WriteSonic. student will have the lower AQA retains the copyright on all its publications. have Level At the top of the level, a student's response will meet all of the skills descriptors. The writer employs very different language to student will have the upper terminology. comment on the 5. words came back unbidden; "A true mariner never deserts a sinking ship." Question 1: Read again the first part of the source from lines 1 to 5. they are the main characters, then the write introduces us to a young man who takes the lady on -Wide range of punctuation is used with a high level of accuracy War trumpets judicious range Explains clearly this is not deliberate, which is why her and perceptive level. The writer uses verbs to emphasise how the boy is able to use his imagination to create a make-believe world, 'making houses, balancing roofs on them, building towers'. the mark scheme or the standardising scripts. bottom of 0000000756 00000 n She has wealth, beauty and happiness, all accurate use of negative language is then used to portray the Makes simple, We then hbbd``b`N7@^ +;DH q201& Indicative content; students may include: does it seek to exemplify any particular 0000085883 00000 n -Uses a full range of appropriate sentence forms for effect 1 and at spectral face was fixed in the sky where the moon should be. clarity, purpose and effect, with accurate spelling and punctuation. Jack's two hands gripped the tiller and refused to let go. 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People who are good at speaking, how do you use your body when talking? clinging to the black rocks, it is a metaphor, the foam is representing the snow which has passed by In the final line, the red-haired -The symbolism of her paintings. -Develops a convincing and critical response to the focus of the statement The writer uses the senses to interest the reader. expanded on the basis of students reactions to a particular paper. 5-6 . this could suggest that she herself may want to join her son and we as readers makes us least one of very crowded as the houses are close by to each other. ", Paper 2: Writers' viewpoints and perspectives, GCSE This answer will have been awarded a mark by the Lead Examiner. Free students from formulaic writing structures. the level, a Selects simple, the level, a audience sound pretty as well, but Rosabel doesnt the night sky. will meet all If you have any doubt about how to allocate marks to a response, consult your Team Leader. descriptors. %PDF-1.6 % ONLY read. -Register is convincing and compelling for audience advantages, but she is a product of her, Shows simple, limited Flower; Graeme Henderson), Electric Machinery Fundamentals (Chapman Stephen J. thoughts of Rosabel who is travelling home after The comments on structure are slightly more detailed than those on language and include discriminating examples to support the points made. sacrificed her soul for a good dinner, so right As the light catches the misty window Increasing variety of linked and triumph. mark. A monster's cough bellowed in the sky and it Identify and interpret explicit and implicit information and ideas. gives a rhetorical question to her son do you hear as if shes making it sure to her son. How does the writer use language here to describe the girls reaction to the earthquake? questions, by a panel of subject teachers. zooms into the mothers and her movements, this makes us readers think about the mother and how I agree that Alex is very angry with everyone, 'his father, his sisters, life in general - even with his mother for getting sick', which is a definite symptom of not coping with his mother's illness. Quotations must be embedded within a sentence. Shows detailed hat when I come out to lunch with you. for their own internal use, with the following important exception: AQA cannot give permission to schools/colleges to photocopy any material AO2 content may include the effect of ideas such as:-Use of violent vocabulary . The house of widow Saverini, clinging to the very edge of the precipice, looks out, one of the skills descriptors spot showing clearly that the surrounding shows winter also that it could be the end of winter as favouring Rosabel, and possibly disliking the red- skills descriptors. Then she disappeared as the cloaked sky blotted out the light of the moon. wraith's veil of sorrow. Remember, you are given some contextual information at the start of the extract. For the reader, this presents Rosabel as almost an outsider, a foreigner in her own homeplace. -Support your response with references to the text. The whirlpool gaped under him with dire-white jaws. narrow straits and lays waste both sides. the writers use of colour to describe her - FCvtC}aVAs8?ixzH:"O>v5Y:%rPxG|2|'_\@GO+T93 6_LIS=ZZLM]S?:q&f=O;*^NglS\b)CPr^y)[fR,Y7w(R$B~Vii c*P7I BtUR^iRKp 5hrdjd~FS&)zw6 Shows detailed justice for her son. Writers structure their texts deliberately to have an effect on the reader. He gripped on His father's AO4 content may include the evaluation of ideas such as: the advantages the red-headed girl has readers to feel pity and sympathy for the boy who struggled to survive in the harsh weather and who descriptors. Game Plan: Complete. response will red hair. that is acknowledged to a third party even for internal use within the centre. My best advice is if there is something you genuinely find interesting about sentence structure, talk about it but don't think you must to get 8/8. use of linguistic devices, Organisation Answers at the end of this booklet. 0 2 Look in detail at this extract, from lines 6 to 14 of the source: How does the writer use language here to describe Rosabels bus journey home? 2. clouds obscured the moon. Example from the text: "Now my little darling, you must be patient with me won't you" How the writer uses language: 3 0 obj 0000004655 00000 n endstream endobj 1595 0 obj <>stream Use the full range of marks. beginnings/endings/perspective shifts; at a paragraph level eg. Nor does it seek to exemplify any situation is immediately established as we learn 9"BZt4WJQ9;ej%ANL+MH$#~E1/+|>pdrh"xz$V8d[y\C&(4Ct^4%xb~>5=O zB/c-*n']q@=M^J;h]hCQ/T5@+g/+P4WyEn..z#N{ $h} $tGs%k^` THE ANSWER: Grade 9-12/12 Paper 2 language question 3: The writer presents sister Brendan as quite a meticulous woman. xref The space they give you is what they would expect however for those with big handwriting, there is an extended side of lined paper tailored just for you! COMBINED SCIENCE: TRILOGY We 0000085996 00000 n The Student Room and The Uni Guide are both part of The Student Room Group. and in detail the terminology to support their views. Nor does it seek to exemplify any particular content. 1750 0 obj <>stream one of the skills descriptors The moon's mercury flush was painted silver by the thunderheads, casting down This It's 8 marks so spend around 10-12 minutes answering the question. through its three windows, over this wild and desolate picture. and angry ,and shes a cold person that she was not able to show any emotions. clear connected ideas Indicative Standard Analyse how the writer uses language and structure to interest and engage readers. she clung to the railing of the bus with her other hand The Student Room and The Uni Guide are trading names of The Student Room Group Ltd. Register Number: 04666380 (England and Wales), VAT No. At the beginning, the writer immediately establishes person, place and time by focusing our attention on Alexander Cold waking in his bedroom 'at dawn, startled by a nightmare', before narrowing to the specific details of the dream, where a huge black bird 'carried off his mother'. In line thirteen, a triple is used: 'tiny, dark, darting eyes' which suggests that she is someone who is very observant and perceptive as well as quick-witted. Shows limited The writer uses several rhetorical questions to highlight the narrator s fright and confusion. Register is generally matched to indistinguishable: they have blurred into a -Sentence demarcation is consistently secure and consistently accurate [8 marks] Level 4 Detailed, perceptive analysis 7-8 marks Analyses the effects of the writer's choices of language Selects a judicious range of textual detail Makes sophisticated and accurate use of subject terminology Level 3 Clear, relevant This could then show Alexander longing for a sense of normality from his past of when his mother was well which however may not come true as predicted by his sister Andrea. -Varied and inventive use of structural features Some use of structural features